Saturday, 9 October 2010

Magpie 35 Negative Affirmative

Behind the cracked leaves
blue sky fights for my attention
creating Polonious like images
demanding affirmation -
a dog's snout sniffing
a catfish snuffling
dad's big nose snorting.

Between the crumpling leaves
other shapes shoulder consciousness aside
negatives outmuscling positives
truths outshouting truth
silences screaming stories unsaid
the in-between lives exposing
the superficial lies.

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Brian Miller said...

ack. nice write, great imagery...silence screaming stories fav line...but a dreadful place to be.

Anonymous said...

I love writing that makes me think. I did need to look up Polonius though. I love the interpretation of the leaf shapes.

Anonymous said...

I like this poem about truth and lies, the way you interpreted individual leaves in the pic, Poloniuses demanding attention. And negatives do rather outmuscle positives a lot, don't they? Well done!

Tess Kincaid said...

Love the Polonius shnaz.

Kathe W. said...

sometimes we need to sout down the negatives as they some how are more pushy than the positives.
Nicely written!

Linda Bob Grifins Brin Korbetis said...

wise words...
well put.

signed...bkm said...

catfish snuffling, dog sniffing...nice images...bkm

Unknown said...

truth and lies
and my word verification is holyties


Helena said...

Steve, that was excellent. I loved the line "dad's big nose snorting" dad had a cracker of a nose. Could lose a finger up it!

One Prayer Girl said...

As for me, my favorite line is, "the in-between lives exposing the superficial lies." I know all about that. Wonderful writing so well put.



Tumblewords: said...

I love the push/pull of this fine piece!

Reflections said...

Love the last line...'the in-between lives exposing
the superficial lies.'

Left with the haunting of the negatives, powerful..

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