Saturday, 9 October 2010

Magpie 35 Negative Affirmative



Behind the cracked leaves
blue sky fights for my attention
creating Polonious like images
demanding affirmation -
a dog's snout sniffing
a catfish snuffling
dad's big nose snorting.

Between the crumpling leaves
other shapes shoulder consciousness aside
negatives outmuscling positives
truths outshouting truth
silences screaming stories unsaid
untold.
the in-between lives exposing
the superficial lies.


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13 comments:

Brian Miller said...

ack. nice write, great imagery...silence screaming stories unsaid...my fav line...but a dreadful place to be.

Catherine said...

I love writing that makes me think. I did need to look up Polonius though. I love the interpretation of the leaf shapes.

gospelwriter said...

I like this poem about truth and lies, the way you interpreted individual leaves in the pic, Poloniuses demanding attention. And negatives do rather outmuscle positives a lot, don't they? Well done!

willow said...

Love the Polonius shnaz.

kathew said...

sometimes we need to sout down the negatives as they some how are more pushy than the positives.
Nicely written!

Jingle said...

wise words...
well put.

signed...bkm said...

catfish snuffling, dog sniffing...nice images...bkm

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

truth and lies
and my word verification is holyties

coincidence?

Lena said...

Steve, that was excellent. I loved the line "dad's big nose snorting"....my dad had a cracker of a nose. Could lose a finger up it!

Prayer Girl said...

As for me, my favorite line is, "the in-between lives exposing the superficial lies." I know all about that. Wonderful writing so well put.

HERE IS MINE

PG

Tumblewords: said...

I love the push/pull of this fine piece!

Reflections said...

Love the last line...'the in-between lives exposing
the superficial lies.'

Left with the haunting of the negatives, powerful..

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