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Saturday, 9 October 2010

Magpie 35 Negative Affirmative



Behind the cracked leaves
blue sky fights for my attention
creating Polonious like images
demanding affirmation -
a dog's snout sniffing
a catfish snuffling
dad's big nose snorting.

Between the crumpling leaves
other shapes shoulder consciousness aside
negatives outmuscling positives
truths outshouting truth
silences screaming stories unsaid
untold.
the in-between lives exposing
the superficial lies.


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12 comments:

  1. Brian Miller10 October 2010 at 22:03

    ack. nice write, great imagery...silence screaming stories unsaid...my fav line...but a dreadful place to be.

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  2. Anonymous10 October 2010 at 22:42

    I love writing that makes me think. I did need to look up Polonius though. I love the interpretation of the leaf shapes.

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  3. Anonymous11 October 2010 at 00:42

    I like this poem about truth and lies, the way you interpreted individual leaves in the pic, Poloniuses demanding attention. And negatives do rather outmuscle positives a lot, don't they? Well done!

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  4. Tess Kincaid11 October 2010 at 01:15

    Love the Polonius shnaz.

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  5. Kathe W.11 October 2010 at 01:56

    sometimes we need to sout down the negatives as they some how are more pushy than the positives.
    Nicely written!

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  6. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall11 October 2010 at 02:28

    wise words...
    well put.

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  7. signed...bkm11 October 2010 at 02:34

    catfish snuffling, dog sniffing...nice images...bkm

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  8. Unknown11 October 2010 at 10:51

    truth and lies
    and my word verification is holyties

    coincidence?

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  9. Helena11 October 2010 at 23:23

    Steve, that was excellent. I loved the line "dad's big nose snorting"....my dad had a cracker of a nose. Could lose a finger up it!

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  10. One Prayer Girl12 October 2010 at 08:50

    As for me, my favorite line is, "the in-between lives exposing the superficial lies." I know all about that. Wonderful writing so well put.

    HERE IS MINE

    PG

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  11. Tumblewords:12 October 2010 at 11:24

    I love the push/pull of this fine piece!

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  12. Reflections12 October 2010 at 15:27

    Love the last line...'the in-between lives exposing
    the superficial lies.'

    Left with the haunting of the negatives, powerful..

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